S.S. Rose

Hello there... So I kind of liked this poem. I liked the numerical progression of age but got rather bored with the "I remember being..." over and over and over ...

Hello Daydreams, This piece is pretty good, but I noticed a lot of similarities to Scott Westerfeld's Uglies series. It also kind of reminded me of the Matrix somewhat. You ...

Hello Conrad Rice, So this was a nice little piece of writing. Thanks for posting it. Yes, I enjoyed it, but I think you might have gone a bit deeper. ...

Hello cjscoot. Nice to get a taste of your prose. All in all, pretty good. It got my attention. Would I by it from B&N? Probably not. Not if this ...

I am a bit dissatisfied with this piece. It seems to be just like every other melodramatic love poem that I have ever read in my life. I like the ...

Interesting, and quite well done. A few grammar errors: too blind to face their problems and take responsibility for our actions. Change their to our if you're going to talk ...

'Ello there. So...nice job, overall. I have a few issues to discuss, though. Left to clean up the mess That you left me in I'm not sure if you repeated ...

Hmm...interesting. I liked, as your other commentators noted, the originality of the idea, but I also thought the rhyming was forced. When you write poetry, you should rhyme to write, ...

Hmm...I like it. All in all, it's a good job. This piece is quite "organic"....not presumptious in the slightest. You've gotten across the gist of what's going on in the ...

Hello, karribeandiva. :) Honestly, join the club. Every writer loves and criticizes their own work more than anyone else does. It's called egoism and the only thing we can do ...

This was fantastic....achingly beautiful and - and I simply cannot believe that you think you cannot write well!!! The only thing (nitpick-wise) is that "ach" in the first stanza should ...

Nice job! A very emotive piece of work. " Along with a life's confusion " just doesn't seem to flow right to me, perhaps you can tweak it a bit. ...

A pretty piece of poetry overall, but I'm sorry to say that a couple of garish grammatical errors make it decidedly less attractive. " Dinning " should be " Dining ...

Hello there! A few grammatical errors here and there, I noticed. "Stinged" should be "stung" even if it messes up your rhyme scheme. I don't quite like your use of ...

Being new to this forum, I'm still working my reviewing process. But I shall try to be constructive: my first reaction to the piece was that it contains a myriad ...